The Movie Theatre
“Ssshh” Whispered Shane “ Be quiet!” The Theatre was as dark as a scary cave. In the movie Theatre it smelled like cooked popcorn and caramel ice cream .the ice cream was smooth soft and delicious. I imagined that the ice cream was as cold as the antarctic . I had a scary feeling that something strange was going to pop up on the big screen and I thought it was going to freak me out but it didn’t.Instead I felt a mouse scratching my legs while I was sitting down watching the movie. I began to shake my foot and stamp it like a crazy clown. I heard a crashing noise ‘Shane can you hear that?’ “ what ‘said john ‘the crashing noise no’.
A few minutes later John was gone to get some more drinks Shane stayed behind and waited for him to come back a while ago Shane was jumping on the chairs in the cinema Suddenly the chairs broke and then he got stuck between the chairs Help help!!! his voice echoed in the damp,dark cinema but no one came.
When John came back he saw someones hand waving out and he thought “Where is Shane?” I thought “He came with me Shane Shane help me John held him tightly
When John came back he saw someones hand he held him as tight as a vice and pulls him up and John said are you alright yes Thank you very much for helping me when the movie finished the went back home like nothing happened.
A great effort with your story writing. I am so proud to see that you have included adjectives, similies and onomatopoeia to achieve your learning intention for this task. Your next step is to edit each piece and include speech marks.
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